The Cheshire Cat

Another great chapter here! :) I'm loving the characters, though I still picture Mute as an man. XD I just have one bit of critique... SAGE: (chuckles) I don’t know ...

I'm in love with Mute I think. XD I feel so sad; I just wanna give him a huge hug. Again, this was an amazing idea, and you do an ...

I really love this so far. I love the interaction between Sage and Mute. Mute's fear every time he thought Sage was gone really touched me. I know I'd be ...

Wow, I really enjoyed this! :) It was amazing for a first try, and very entertaining as well. I would have prefered a better ending - it was a little ...

This was...really funny. XD I loved it. Your character is great, and the story is interesting. You draw the audience in without giving too much away, which is great. I ...

That was a truly wonderfull read. I hadn't expected to read the whole thing, but I just couldn't stop. It had everything I could want in a story - humor, ...

Whooo! I found it! XD I've been looking for where you kept this story since you told me about it. Only today did I see it above the rest of ...

Ben: HAVE YOU HEAR THAT FUCKIN THING? \ 'Heard' Okay that was the only peice of grammer I could find that wasn't up to snuff. *applauds* Other then that, I ...

Wow. I am extremely impressed by this piece. It's a perfect start to a story. In my opinion as a writer, the first chapter should always start out with either ...

I, however, was highly amused. “He’s going ‘pop pop’ when he points his gun somewhere. What a dumbass. This’ll be easy.” XD lmao... Apparently most people only do it if ...

Down the Drain is one of the more compelling stories I have noticed today. The title drew me in, and the interesting story kept me there. You use great descriptive ...

Jeez...I've been in the exact same situation. Are you writing this from personal experiance or creative expression? Whichever it is, somehow, this poem hits me where it counts. Excelent job! ...

First off, let me say how much I am enjoying your story. The characters are well developed, and the storyline intruiging so far. I do have some Critique for you, ...

Wow! Excellent job on this story! I'm finding myself being drawn in, and I'll definately check out your other chapters. I just have one little thing you might want to ...

Awesome job, I love the rebellious feel to it, like you would be shouting it at a rally. It holds a good point as well. If you elaborated on this ...